Metaphor number 1:
Love is a grenade
The seconds are numbered away,
Until someone will pull the pin,
And scatter chaos into your world
Chaos, that will pierce your mind.
Love is a cool drink of water
It soothes the soul from the fires of life,
From the chaos that surround us.
Yet it makes pawns of us:
It makes us vulnerable to it's every move.
Life is an oak tree,
Every path in life
Will lead to a certain branch, a certain leaf
But to reach all of them throughout the course of life
Is something that can never be attained.
Life is a dream,
It can be beautiful;
It can seem surreal
But at the same time
It can turn into a nightmare.
4 comments:
very good. i think it would be helpful if you took one metaphor and really played it out into a full length poem. to really get at the heart of the image.
i like the metaphor about love is like a cool drink of water
Wow, that was like perfection incarnate Eliza, I really loved it! The first one was my favourite.
"Chaos that will pierce your mind" just gets to me.
Thanks guys:) I'm surprised that you liked them since I typed up whatever came to my mind first.
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